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Thumbnail game: ON POINT haha

Great read as well ;) Looking forward to the next chapter!

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Thanks hahaha, I figured the thumbnail would get people's attention.

As to the story itself, glad you enjoyed it, I can't wait to publish the next chapter. I'm planning it to be only 16 pages or so long, I don't want every chapter to 30 pages or so long.

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Excellent chapter. The battle was well-done, intense and interesting. I could feel the emotions of Sigrun. You built the tension well after the first chapter, now I just gotta see what's up with this map. Good work.

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Aww thanks, alright wasn’t sure about how well done the battle was. I’m glad I conveyed Sigrun’s emotions well, writing female characters is something I find tricky as I wish to endow them with femaleness and in the case of Sigrun also a certain ferocity.

Yeah the map’s trouble hahaha, and thanks a bunch for the praise.

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The only fault I can find in your story, so far, is the "My dear reader," but that's just your style, and it works.

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Hmm, I'll have to slow down on using that term in the future, I've thought about it before and think it might be best to use it more sparingly. Thanks for confirming this suspicion on my part, thanks Joseph Wiess.

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Friends don't let Friends use "My dear reader," like cheap booze.

I remember when other writers used to use that phrase. After a while, I tended to mentally erase it.

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Hahahaha thanks

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Jan 27
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Glad you liked it, hopefully I'll be able to improve them, by the time I get to the end, as this is supposed to be a 'Nordic Saga' of sorts I'm gonna need plenty of battle scenes.

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Jan 27
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Hahahaha, I had to get it out early just for you, next I gotta work on my other stories to get them all out on time.

But I hope to have Darkspire Ch 3, out towards the end of Feb or early March.

I really do like your enthusiasm for this story, apologise for the long wait and hope this chapter met your expectations.

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Jan 27
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Hahahaha I am going to have to do that sort of thing when I get back to editing my second Scottish novel so no judgments.

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Jan 27
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I know, which is why I had to get this chapter out for you. My hope is that the next one will be shorter, as Ch 2 was supposed to be shorter but somehow ended up twice the length.

Ch 3 will be at most 15-16 pages. I need to use it to also get the characters at last on the road.

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