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Thanks for tagging, guys! :-)

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Anytime!

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Where do I get chapter 1?

This is so well-written.

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It's interesting that the Emishi culture combines both Japanese and Ainu characteristics.

I grinned at "Well said tono!" because it's a bit like slapping the CEO on the back but it did the job.

The black fog was intriguing and I hope we learn what it was.

I think it would be beneficial to add an extra new line or dinkus when the perspective changes from one character to the other.

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I always thought Emishi & Ainu were the same, or mostly the same.

As to the black fog, I plan to offer up an explanation of it, it has to do with the black candles, which we'll be getting into in a few chapters.

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It sounds like magic!

And yes I think the Emishi were at least part Ainu.

There are many Ainu place-names in the Tohoku region.

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Hehehehehe, because….

As to the Emishi & Ainu yeah, I plan to keep using Ainu place-names and names for Emishi-Ainu stuff. I planned to use the terms interchangeably, but have since hesitated.

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Why hesitate?

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Fair point

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Oh good point, I’ll make a note of that, so add an extra line or ‘dinku’ what’s a ‘dinkus’? When changing perspectives?

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A dinkus (singular) can be three asterisks, or pretty much anything to separate sections of paragraphs.

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Ohhhh sorry about that, I didn’t know that’s what its called okay.

I’ll start doing that from now on. And will add that to this chapter and Chapter 1 tomorrow before I do any other writing. I genuinely needed that correction/advice, it’s definitely gonna improve this work.

What’s funny is I used to do that but then stopped and I don’t know why. I’ll have it added after the morning (am over-tired had a hard day, so gonna sleep off the problems and wake up to a better day).

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I am reading a novel by a Japanese Author now that I think you would like. It's Castle of Owls: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fukurō_no_Shiro

I know, the main roles are not Samurai but Ninja but their role is interesting. They also had an honour code, though different from the Samurai.

Very interesting chapter. Truly interesting how you describe the feelings and reactions of the characters.

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Thanks, the idea is to delve into not only bushido, but also the inner being of Satomine, and that of those he comes across, using a combination style of my own and a little bit of Yoshikawa Eiji’s, and Howard’s. I quite like the result sometimes and other times feel it could be improved.

I’m mostly going to be sticking to Satomine’s perspective, and journey. It helps he’s my favourite character in this tale.

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Ok, I was just recommending the book not because I thought you should change Satomine's perspective but because it can help with the honour codes and the ambient for future chapters. The bushido wasn't the same as the ninja's code and that could sometimes have interesting developments. But I understand your viewpoint too, specially if you have the story developed by now.

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Nah I didn’t get that impression, send me the title and I’ll pick it up, I’d love to read it.

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Really enjoyed this!

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I’m glad you liked the two chapters thus far of Akuma no Ran. Hopefully Ch 3, will be out soon also. I love writing this novel and am so glad to be done with this chapter, I just want to deal with Ch 3-4 and get Satomine to Miyako (Heian-kyo/Kyoto) and into the political webs there.

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Interesting

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Arigatou!

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